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I sweat in the heat when sun shines bright,
I shiver in the numb cold night,
I pray ,I hope ,I bid,I strife……
Why I am not blessed with crystal clear dawns?
why I always have to fight?
A little of salt, sweet and pepper,
something bitter with a dash of lime,
I wish to taste all moods of clime.
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I walk beside the lorn lagoon,
specially at the dinner time,
it doesn’t cost me even half a dime,
I find ease of heart and peace of mind,
This is how I escape from hunger,
but never thought of escaping from life.
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I build the sand castles on the sea side,
as if it’s my house and take a dream ride,
It doesn’t cost me even half a dime,
I find ease of heart and peace of mind,
This is how I escape from being homeless,
but never thought of escaping from life.
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My skin absorbs the heat and cold,
When they pierce more, I just rhyme,
It doesn’t cost me even half a dime,
I find ease of heart and peace of mind,
This is how I escape from being without a wrap,
But never thought of escaping from life.
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Beautiful poetry. I am very critical about poetry in general. ad yours is one of those I really liked. very interesting place to put the refrain – right in the middle of the paragraph. liked the message too – whatever hardships you face don’t quit. good one. your work is in the definitely in the reckoning for one of my 3 votes.
That was very good. Beautiful and meaningful words weaved together into a beautiful poem.
Life is indeed very harsh!
u did it again
with perfection….n honesty……n conviction
wat else?
10/10………without any second thought…….
i prefer ur post than mine for escape…..
i dont want to write more as i want to read it as many times as possible until i drench my thirst……
I am sure that i will vote for it, but lemmi check with other posts before i decide how many votes it can pull……
hey geeta…….i dont know which adjectives can aptly describe my responses and reflexes to ur post….
Generally, i dont like poetry as i find them quite flowery and unrealistic……but ur poetry made quite a heavy impact…..i am liking it more every time i am reading it….
the selection of words, their placement, appeal ……everything fell in right place
am really enjoying reading it ……. discovering new things and flavours with every read
Beautiful. Loved it.
I can visualize and feel every situation you have described…
lovely write up
well penned.
Every word had a reason in the poem, beautiful ! I really hope you never escape writing .. you have been gifted !
Wishes for BAT-10 !
in love with me and life..escape !
lovely poetry.. not much of poems seen in BAT but your poem hit the mark. very beautiful!
Escape
Brilliant play with words
Girl you’ve done it again
Loved it!!
today morning i got a fresh thought of making a documentary on this poem if possible…..
i want to extract the visual appeal it has brought out in my mind….
am still enjoying reading it …..
visual poetry at its best. kudos to you
thank you for visitng my post. keep dropping my.
best wishes
Great poem work there Geetha! You did mention little little things in life that we tend to ignore and take light. I like when you said:
I build the sand castles on the sea side,
as if it’s my house and take a dream ride,
It doesn’t costs me even half a dime,
I think I will remember that for a long time. Good job and keep writing.
Sureindran R. – Escape
nice poem , but i think more dimensions were needed instead of repetition, ” never thought of escaping from life.” what does this mean ? that u are happy in your life & never felt need to think of escaping form it…something like this ?
Though I don’t understand poetry much but this one was very simple so read it and most important thing I liked in it was it was the positivity “But never thought of escaping from life.” …
Beautifully written
‘But never thought of escaping from life.’ … Lovely thoughts! Hw I wish ppl cn always think like u did
This is how I escape from hunger,
but never thought of escaping from life….
These lines made all the difference which spoke volumes of emotions and intentions…..
loved them….
Nice one! I like the moral of not giving up… =) Good luck with BAT!
One of the few poems I have read with such a nice message in it. “This is how I escape from being homeless,
but never thought of escaping from life.” -> my most favourite line and stanza. One of the best entries for BAT.
very beautifully written
Hi Geeta.. I read it twice 2 realise its beauty.. this is one post full of optimism within the potentially pessimist environment.. Many of us have talked of suicide as an escape to build our stories (I myslf wrote about a migrant labourer commiting suicide) bt this post is full of hope. Very nice piece of poetry nd evn I liked the use of refrain (I learned this wrd frm Fool’s comment) in the middle of d verse.. Gud poetry with gud msg.. kudos
Wow..such power in words..such amazing image created..
@The Fool
Actually I am really unaware of the parametric restrictions of the poetry.It was just free flow of feelings.Thanks a lot for your encouraging words..Keep hopping..
@Nethra
Yes Nethra ,life is really very harsh…you need to keep up your spirits…Thanks for your wonderful comment.
@Mahesh
Buddy,your constant support and words of encouragement brought out my creativity…Thanks a million…
@Sudhakar
Thanks a lot…Welcome to my space..keep dropping by.
@Rajlakshmi
I am glad you liked it…Welcome to itslifeblog…keep visiting..
@Sourav
Thanks buddy for such beautiful words…Welcome to my space and all the best to you too..
@Leo
Hey thanks buddy,those words of appreciation which comes from a fabulous poet like you are really precious…Keep sharing your views
@CB
Thanks a lot..:))
@Mahesh
Your words inspire me to enhance my writings…Thanks again
@Tikuli
Welcome to my space..Thanks for such sweet words…Keep hopping here..:))
@Sureindran
Hey ,That means a lot to me…Thanks a lot….Keep stopping by…
@Sunil
Welcome to my space buddy…Read the poem in general perspective as if a common man who toils day and night to meet both the ends is speaking.Here ‘I’ the first person specifically does not refers to me…I did not use the second person ‘he’ so that the poetry gives a complete impact….I hope I have cleared my point upto the level of your satisfaction…Thanks for questioning..It gave me the opportunity to make myself clear…
@Dhiman
thank you so much Dhiman…You need to be positive in life…Thanks and keep visiting…
@Swaram
Yes Swaru,I too wish that…Thanks dear..
@Mahesh
) Good luck to you too..keep dropping by..
“bows down” ..You create enthusiastic environment with your words…Thanks buddy..
@PB
Thank you so much
@Avada
Hey buddy,I am glad you liked it…keep visiting..
@Vipul
Hey Marshall,Welcome to my space…You read it twice…OMG…You hit the nail on the head..I too had the same scene at the back of my mind when I was writing the poetry…Frankly speaking I don’t know anything about the meters of writing poetry….Thanks a million for sharing your views…keep dropping in…
@Comfy
Thanks Comfy,elated to have such a nice comment from your side…
Excellently written, Geeta. So thought provoking.
No matter what happens, never quit, never escape. Fight it out.
Kudos, yaar. I loved it.
All the best!
hey geeta,
where you could have concluded 
nice poem, very lucid, I have troubles understanding poetry…..but this one very simply and beautifully written with a universal theme, but left me hanging in the ended. Like I said, I am not a good judge of poetry, but if it helps, I felt like reading one more stanza
and thanks a lot for dropping by! I could not participate in this BAT because I was busy working on the new site, you see, I was not into programming and websy stuff, so had to learn it to do it
but I am still reading up the BAT posts slowly 
and hope to participate next time around….
@Karthik
Thanks a ton buddy for your lovely words of appreciation..
@Murali
I noted down your suggestion ,,but here I took three main problems food ,shelter and clothing of a common man who works hard day and night to fulfill his basic needs…But next time I won’t disappoint you..shall take care of proper conclusion….Thanks a lot for your precious comment…shall look forward for more from your side…
awesome work! all the best!
Lovely message, woven into philosophy and verses.The will will to keep fighting is nicely etched.
just one tiny teeny weeny typo..
‘It doesn’t costs me even half a ..’ extra s there…
overall – quite liked your way of presenting resolve instead of the usual fire and glory…
Amazing. The poetry isnt one of those that require one to crack his head to decipher what someone wants to say through it which only makes this piece even more amazing.
Beautiful
@Mehak
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Thanks and wish you the same.
@Gyanban
Welcome to my space GB.I am glad to have a comment from such a wonderful writer.Thanks for pointing out my mistake and sharing your true opinion which lead me towards improvement..I appreciate this gesture of yours…Keep sharing…
@Vibhushan
Welcome to my space..thanks a lot for such a lovely comment.
@Shilpa
Thanks
a gud poem with a sweet message,that life is always worth living…we just need to look for the right reasons
a post of mine with a similar kind of message….hope u like it
http://mukul-thedarkside.blogspot.com/2010/02/no-matter-what-life-is-good.html